I would love to see one with a black man turning into a girl superhero
And it got me thinking that this is a premise, not a story. To turn this premise into a story, we have to do a lot of work on it. Let me show you! (It'd be cooler with a whiteboard or chalkboard, but whatever.)
Let's take it in order. You want a black man. OK, how old is he? Is he tall or short? Rich or poor? Does he live alone or does he have family?
He turns into a girl...how? Magic? Some kind of chemical? Lab accident? Alien technology?
As for the girl part, how old is the girl? Since Amazon banned age regression stories (from me anyway) she'd have to at least be eighteen. Is she fat or thin? Tall or short? Big tits or little tits?
And if she's a superhero, what are her powers? Flight? Invulnerability? Super speed? Heat vision? Telekinesis? What does her costume look like? Cape or no cape?
Only when you start making all these decisions can you turn the premise into an actual story. That's pretty much how all stories start out: you have a basic premise and it snowballs as you start to fill in those specific details. Hopefully as you fill in the details you answer the rest of the questions about the story, like: who is the antagonist? What do they want? What does the hero want?
Until you can work all that out, you aren't going to have much more than a premise.
There you go. Class dismissed.
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here ya go...it's an older man and he's average height, maybe short, never stood out of a crowd kind of guy, maybe a bit on the nerdy side so wasn't into the basketball and rap games like others in his neighborhood. doesn't have a family (they died tragically in a car accident or something) and he comes across a used bookstore or something and sees a comic book he had as a kid and it was one he liked, but it got ruined or thrown out so he goes and buys it and as he's reading it it brings back memories and as he falls asleep he wishes he could have been a superhero so he could have saved his family and done heroic things to live a stand out life.
so then he wakes up in the body of a twenty-something woman who is like a perfect specimen of an idea woman...tall and thin and well-proportioned (should she be black as well or go for the double-swap and make her white or hispanic?) and she's wearing a superhero costume. he's confused, he thinks it's Halloween or something but then he discovers he has powers like super strength and speed or whatever. he/she figures out how to use their powers a bit and is popular and makes some friends and starts to fall for someone but then a massive earthquake hits the city and there's damage everywhere and as a superhero he/she is trying to help everyone but ends up not being able to save the person they were falling in love with and their family and comes too late to help and is in anguish.
and then wakes back up as the original character and learns that even being a superhero doesn't mean you can do everything and some things are beyond even the powers of the powerful when fate is against you. and he finds a way to take some comfort in that and he decides to change his life and be more open and go out with people and whatever...
there...story...make it prettier with more words lol :p
I would change it to the comic book heroine was one his daughter liked and was reading in the car when the accident happened. Then he dreams he becomes that hero and tries to save the day but can't.
You two could co-write it :)
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